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It's My Memory...
The midnight oil lights my night
It tries to show the way
But my eyes grow dim and my sight
Doesn't see like yesterday
Oh woe is me, I wish for strength
Like I had in youth
The nights grow longer in their length
The days more short on truth
The lies we tell unto ourselves
Ever to keep us calm
Rely on memories from the shelves
Applied to our souls as balm
Different memories I have got
Of those friends so long ago
But I'm alive and they are not
They can't say it isn't so
So take each tale with some salt
A grain or two is fine
Really man, it was his fault
It certainly wasn't mine
Now, when I tell you tales of yore
It will be of folk gone by
Stories yeah; I've got more
And I'll tell them 'till I die
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Rula
Sat, 2020-04-25 08:30
Lovely read Gee
having gathered most of good poetry ingredients...
I'd choose the stanza with "Different memories...." if I have to choose my favorite.
Just stumbled with the flow of the stanza before the last... Who is that you blame am not sure.
Other than that, nothing but lots of appreciation
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Geezer
Sat, 2020-04-25 09:37
It was...
to show the old adage of taking a tale with a grain of salt. Have you never heard it? "You can take this with a grain of salt."
Implying that there may be a difference of opinion. ~ Geezer.
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author commentRula
Sat, 2020-04-25 15:17
Thank you
For the clarification. Never used the expression though surely have heard of it.
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Geezer
Sat, 2020-04-25 09:41
Thank you...
Glad you like it. In my circles, I'm known for having a story for every occasion. I love to entertain and as long as I can still talk, I guess I will be telling tales.
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author commentc lynn brooks
Sat, 2020-04-25 10:46
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what if you used will not keep up instead of can't just a suggestion
ery nice writing here
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Geezer
Sun, 2020-04-26 22:35
Changed...
the line to read better. Thanks. ~ Geezer.
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author commentGeezer
Sun, 2020-04-26 22:32
Thanks...
for catching that Jerry. Fixed!
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author commentGracy
Mon, 2020-04-27 09:46
Love it, Gee, only one or two
Love it, Gee, only one or two tweaks, I think. I agree with Jerry about "of those days long ago". I wish I could listen to your tales. Will there be no story section here?
Great rhyming and a perfect subject. We all need storytelling these days.
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
Geezer
Mon, 2020-04-27 16:07
Most of my tales...
are told in rhyme. There are a few little tales telling stories about things that are basically true. The story of "What If The Rabbit Is Ugly; the one story that I have posted here, is pretty much how I remember it. Other true stories written in rhyme are: Summer of Ten, Mrs. Moore Gave More and Steve McQueen. Hope you enjoy whatever you choose to read. ~ Geezer.
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