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For Someone Special (Your Best "April Contest")

Your love is just a simple thing
Just held here in my mind
Your love is just so snugly kept
That it is never left behind.

It's not a thing promised to be
It's there for ever and eternity
It does not stay the freedom of our minds
It's yours and mine for all the times .

Something felt, not seen, not found
It's ours to keep and carry around
When it is needed there is no fuss
Dear friend it is there for both of us .

Not touching as there are ones that see
But holding safe each in our minds free.
So we can feel when there are bad times
Of problems that run through our minds

There is one thing that we can turn to
Who will say, that our love is for us two.
It is gentle on my mind..

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I have several poems that are my loves, just one will do don't want to bore you lol
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Lol... I'm here dear friend. Loooong time ha?
This absolutely is shone with Sparrow's unconditional love for everyone and the special ones..
The only stanza that I stumbled at is the one before the last couplet, but it could be only me.
You and others are giving the judges a hard time deciding who is the winner especially with my participation there... Lol... Just kidding
Take care young Sparrow!

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As you say Loooong time for us to be, but I walk with you always you must see..
I am there in the drift of the dunes, and the flourish of the flowers as you select some blooms..
The song of a bird as it talks to the world, some of the words thought so never heard..
Take care young lady and protect your family from the bad illness that is here with us,
Yours, as always, Ian xx

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Thank you for your visit
Stay safe and well
my best to all your Kin,
Yours as always, Ian ..

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What a lovely, romantic poem. Perfect for these times of isolation. I especially like S4, the best of a series of warm thoughts. I have only one small crit, to take or toss, it may only be me...In the strophe posted below I'd try to remove a few words:

Your love is (just) a simple thing
held here in my mind
Your love is (just so) snugly kept
(that it is) it's never left behind.

You've several other repetitions or words that could be tweaked, but maybe it's just me. The whole poem is heartwarming.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Many thanks for your lovely comment..
As this is a poem from a few years ago changes will have to wait..
I am always guilty of using too many words,
I probably talk a lot when let loose lol.
This is for the April Contest so I will edit after the event.
Take care out there, the world is changing,
Yours as always Ian x

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