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A Surprise From Santa's Sac(k) - An Xmas Poem
Santa sits in his dark grotto
Without his underpants
He's got something on his mind
If he gets half a fucking chance.
A Mummy brings her child to see him
But it's not the lad he's after.
Santa wants to grab his buxom Mum
And OH how he wants to shaft her.
Santa hands the lad to his elf
And drags Mum round the back
He has a nice present for her:
A load of semen from his sac.
After the Christmas deed is done,
The child goes off with his mother;
They don't know in nine months' time
He'll have a bastard brother.
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Free verse
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How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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London, Culture Capital of the World
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Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).
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Edna Sweetlove
Fri, 2020-03-20 10:01
We'll beg to..
...disagree, then. I wouldn't like to meet a 14 year old who knew about Santa's sac.
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author commentGracy
Fri, 2020-03-20 17:51
Hi, I came over to read your
Hi, I came over to read your poem and find that you've got excellent end rhymes. But the subject doesn't atract me, don't know why, but it's off putting. Just saying.
Peace, Gracy
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Edna Sweetlove
Fri, 2020-03-20 18:07
No one likes to think of...
...Santa as a Weinstein type but if I were looking for a job to hide pervy inclinations, I'd go for Santa. Or maybe a priest or a boy scout leader.
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Edna
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author commentGeezer
Sat, 2020-03-21 10:44
Sadly...
how true.Though I find it rather good with rhyme, I didn't enjoy the theme. Just sayin' ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove
Sat, 2020-03-21 12:31
The theme...
...is perhaps a little risqué...
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Edna
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author commentscribbler
Tue, 2020-06-09 14:38
This
is up to your usual standards and you likely know what I think of those standards
Edna Sweetlove
Tue, 2020-06-09 15:03
Ignored.
I ignore you.
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author commentscribbler
Tue, 2020-06-09 17:41
Saying
you ignore me is not ignoring me. Any educated person would know that if they didn't go to some British indoctrination center
Edna Sweetlove
Tue, 2020-06-09 18:26
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[ignored]
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author commentscribbler
Tue, 2020-06-09 20:31
see
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