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The Cynic's Song

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Sun, 2020-03-01 11:17

Recession, what recession, I couldn't care a jot
You should check out all the money that I've got.
I don't do any work as my dear old Dad's a banker
And he's a fat cat too, a total goddam wanker.

I look out my window to see the peasants grovel
In the dirt, starving in a filthy Council hovel;
I just sit and smile and sip my Laurent-Perrier.
Long live capitalism, I just couldn't be any merrier.

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I'd hate anyone to think that Edna is cruel or uncaring about the welfare of the lower orders. I often instruct one of my servants to give a few coins (of their own, naturally) to beggars.
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Edna Sweetlove

Sun, 2020-03-01 17:44

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...but Marie-Antionette never said "let them eat cake". What the silly bitch said was "Qu'ils mangent de la brioche" which would mean "Let them eat a brioche", the latter being a rich, buttery and expensive roll. Also it's apochryphal.

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Geezer

Mon, 2020-03-02 09:53

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The quote or the roll? Not that it mattered much to the great unwashed. I am sure that the sentiment was the same and they
probably ate whatever foods they found at the palace, without a thought as to the richness, before they hauled them out to be executed. Or maybe they munched on cake and rolls and ate her dogs; as the guillotine dropped her head into the basket.
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Edna Sweetlove

Mon, 2020-03-02 11:35

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...probably included the French royal family too. No one did much washing those days. Maybe that's how they were stinking rich.

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Thu, 2020-03-05 11:03

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wondering about the fake. By the way, How about bringing back the guillotine and public hanging, on T.V.?
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Edna Sweetlove

Thu, 2020-03-05 12:28

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..about such events but, believe you me, they would be VERY popular! Just think of the possibilities...

CELEBRITY EXECUTION! Celebs pull the lever to hang convicted criminals!
HANGING ROAD SHOW! Follow the portable gallows as it tours the nation - win the opportunity to hang a crim!
GENERAL KNOWLEDGE X! Answer questions and the winner gets to choose which of five women on Death Row gets a fatal jab!
CRIMINAL CHOICE! Watch as convicted murderers play poker to see who gets hanged, electrocuted, given a lethal inhection, a free pardon or win $125,000 (£100,000)
CLASSIC WHO WANTS TO BE A HANGMAN! Panel game to win a course in hangman's technology!

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Fri, 2020-03-06 02:23

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really a joke! I'm serious about having public executions for those who are caught in the act or so close that the hounds are on their heels, [thereby eliminating the doubt] and need for a trial. ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

Fri, 2020-03-06 10:26

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...you would favour public state murders on TV. My suggestions for TV shows featuring this was, of course, entirely serious too. They would be more amusing than most TV programmes nowadays and many corporations would be delighted to place their ads in such shows.

Skipping criminal trials is a strikingly exciting idea. Bring back lynching. Trump would have been strung up long ago and so would most senior soldiers. So it's a good thing. The only good soldier is a dead soldier.

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