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WELL OF SILENCE

Like so many countless others
I sit and scribble on a page
about love, nature or long past brothers
or consequences of accruing age,

And I spill my soul and heart
along with ink in every write
trying to put music in each part
often in the closeness of late night.

Tonight I sit here in the dark
beneath a halo of floor lamp
with memories of a singing lark
while outside the storm blows cold and damp.

I know some storm will be my last.
I know it's closer than it was.
I know I've less future than past.
I know time passes without pause.

Yet still I put my pen to page
in hopes each poem will turn out well
but errant thoughts still make me rage.
Will my poems fall into a silent well
once I write my final page?

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a good one! A little ragged at the end, but as always, deep thoughts that resonate with us older folks. ~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I hesitate to be thankful that this resonates with you lol. But we must all face doubts mustn't we?

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All OK and a neat piece about how you are nearly old lol.
One word right at the start could do with replacement.
" myriad " it was used and maybe still in translation of the old languages.
It has a straight meaning of 10000 and to me seems alien to your piece.
Happy new year and look after yourselves out there ,
Yours as always Ian ..

Words can build a nation

After myriad years and myriad poems on myriad subject written in myriad forms I still get myriad words wrong lmao. Appreciate the visit and will check out the use of myriad on edit

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I know some storm will be my last.
I know it's closer than it was.
I know my future is less than my past.
I know time passes without pause.
MAY BE ...

I know some storm will be my last.
it's closer than it was.
my future is less than my past.
time passes without pause.

A knowledgeable poet should avoid repetition
I SUPPOSE
rest it's your compo
scribble on as you wish
HNY 2020 STAN and Susan

I think intentional repetition can be a good thing in emphasizing a point.But I could easily be wrong. Thanks for dropping by

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Deep thought decked with poetic beauty. Nice.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Thank you for dropping by and leaving such kind comment

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So good to read your work again! I have missed doing it. This poem is profound and easily relatable. Very nicely done!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

It's good to have you back and thank you for taking time to comment on this scribble

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It was my pleasure! Love your work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

love this. last two lines' rhythm brings to my mind the sick rose which i love. regarding the comment on knowledgeable poets avoiding repetition, that is the first time i ever heard that. there are reasons poets sometimes use it and a knowledgeable poet should know that.

I have often heard it's best to avoid the close repetition of the same word but I think they mean random close repeat.I am always pleased to see you drop by........stan

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Never fear though I don't always comment I always read your poetry. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thank you. I appreciate knowing that there are folks who enjoy my chicken scratches lol

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Hi, I'm new here, so I apologize if I say anything offensive. Don't think so, it's not my style. Have quite a lot of published poems and came second in IBPC in December 2019.
I love all of your poem, except for the first line. I'm not in favour of beginning with "like" and I agree with others that myriad is over used, though I've often used it myself. The end rhymes are perfect. I'm not good at fixed forms, tho' I've composed several sonnets that I might post here to get iambics and so on correctly.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

And welcome to newport. No need worry about offending me for posting your honest opinion. I'll likely do an edit on this one in a few days and when I do I'll keep your and others' suggestions in mind. BTW if you have any problems on site just holler at me and if I can't help I'll steer you to somebody who can

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Hi scribbler, I can't seem to find poems to comment on. Where are they all? Thanks.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I have found the easiest way to find some poems to comment upon is to click on the "Tools" tab at the top of the page and then to click on "Track all site activity" which lists all the items which have been most recently posted/commented on/edited - it also shows how many comments have been made on each one, so you could go for a poem not yet read/commented on if you wished.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

your beating me to a response. Always good to point new members in the right direction

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..doesn't one?

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Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Edna's response

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Thanks to all of you. Will see about this now. Best

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Because no one else has mentioned it, I like the connection you made with Sound of Silence. :) The reference was a good way to summon some of the same sentiment. It's that kind of pizazz that makes your work interesting. Second and fourth stanzas are my favorite. And since we're all taking stances on the use of repetition, I'd have to say I'm very pro! Alliteration and even meter are types of repetition. Theme and tone are built through forms of repetition. Repeating whole words can no less enrich your work.
Anyways, glad to have ran into this!

raffy

Long time no see. You are spot on with the Sound of Silence . comment since it was the source of inspiration for this one. Repetition can either work or not. I use it sparingly so as to not wear it out lol. Thanks for dropping by

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