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Be Happy hahahaha

I have all along been sitting and glossing
under an apple tree all my life
what happiness can be

a simple comparison of combined incidents
many jovial
few sorry

from the milk of both
if you can but extract
the elixir of glee
‘twill a successful story be
of merriment truly

yes ‘tis poetry alone
as it lends paradise
but lets me be full of gladness
to share here my story

you say what you want to
but be merry
not guilty

one must simply be cheerful
just smile will all ye

let joyousness
your share surely be

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words: 
of happiness syns select any contentment pleasure contentedness satisfaction cheerfulness cheeriness merriment merriness gaiety joy joyfulness joyousness joviality jollity jolliness glee blitheness carefreeness gladness delight good spirits high spirits light-heartedness good cheer well-being enjoyment felicity exuberance exhilaration elation ecstasy delirium jubilation rapture bliss blissfulness euphoria beatitude transports of delight heaven paradise seventh heaven cloud nine delectation jouissance
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Comments

the only suggestion I might have is to eliminate the repetition of happy there are many words that can substitute for happy suggest you might look up the thesaurus online I find it a valuable tool

Chrys

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was aware of the avoidable repetition
will erase some

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but what is glossing? ~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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as in browse we poets like Shakes create
words Gee don't you

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poetess for being Happy
compare with your version
if you please

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