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DARKNESS

Submitted by Simon on Mon, 2019-12-16 04:17

The winds of murder
The waves of death
High--tide flows and blows evil.

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Last few words: 
The bad eggs in the societies.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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c lynn brooks

Wed, 2019-12-25 15:10

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flow(s) and blow(s)
add the s to both expand on these ideas thaat you have where do you want to take this

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Simon

Tue, 2020-01-14 06:55

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you are right rough work most of the times it has errors thanks once more

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