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The Creator

When the eyes have no light
when ears have no sound
then takes flight
the human mind

lets go out to find
the creator
you remind
Created us

him the lover thus
deaf
and her the beautiful
blind

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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carry on! More of this, please. ~ Gee.
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I have posted another shorter one

same title
but in Caps

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please see if it now looks
Good

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I was a bit confused

darkness time
half blind fully deaf

re ed it

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The Last Bugle
Seeing the agitated trumpeter
in one's eyes came a tear
the fourth time at a stretch today
the last bugle did he play
sad day
so many passed away
an unfortunate unexpected day
today

We were though unconsciously waiting
for their last day
sad all went away in one day

(Time limit can't post it yet---Alan)

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I get easily misunderstood

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