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The Creator
When the eyes have no light
when ears have no sound
then takes flight
the human mind
lets go out to find
the creator
you remind
Created us
him the lover thus
deaf
and her the beautiful
blind
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2020-01-10 06:21
I like this...
carry on! More of this, please. ~ Gee.
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lovedly
Sat, 2020-01-11 08:18
Thanks Gee
I have posted another shorter one
same title
but in Caps
lovedly
Fri, 2020-01-10 10:27
A little mix up
please see if it now looks
Good
lovedly
Fri, 2020-01-10 10:55
Thanks
I was a bit confused
darkness time
half blind fully deaf
re ed it
lovedly
Fri, 2020-01-10 11:47
it's good.... but would you like to read one here now I compose
The Last Bugle
Seeing the agitated trumpeter
in one's eyes came a tear
the fourth time at a stretch today
the last bugle did he play
sad day
so many passed away
an unfortunate unexpected day
today
We were though unconsciously waiting
for their last day
sad all went away in one day
(Time limit can't post it yet---Alan)
lovedly
Fri, 2020-01-10 12:50
Less said better understood
I get easily misunderstood