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Perpetuating bliss of gifted silence -
of a chaotic mind prone to violence.
Dare to embrace, but how to let go?
An eerie solace she’s come to know.
Timid eyes scurry like pigs to mud.
Wearing old wounds like shadows -
Certain that nobody could ever love,
an obscure heart that’s tasted blood.

The moment her being became volatile,
after the sun set on innocence and no.
When she loosened up just enough,
to dance freely, amidst a starry glow.
She must have shined like a nova!
Blinding him with rage and desire;
igniting inferno to his black fire.

She sat and recalled the heat of the flash,
with a crisp suite reflecting white walls.
Night assailant emulated troubled past.
Paralyzed haze - floating the small room,
lingering smell of oil and soot consumed.

"Stevie Nicks was singing about thunder."
She whispered underneath her breath.
Attesting to the heartless plunder;
ripping at the soles of tender flesh.
Devising a plan with little strength left.

It was obvious the battle had begun.
Determination now, no matter how long,
to convince his ego that he had won.

The barren land was her only witness,
to the terror rapidly taking place.
Blue jean lining concealing a blade -
tumbling into earth, to be misplaced.
Fight or flight, easy decision made.

Seeing her only defense laying abrupt -
clutching it, before he could blink twice.
The dagger that took and saved a life.
Holding dearly, her lucky stars that night.

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this is wonderful. i think "an obscure heart that has tasted blood" flows a little better. " . . . on innocence and no," i don't get the no. keep in mind i am a novice just willing to give my opinion. i love this.

Thank you Cathy
I''ll add that to the wording.
The innocence and no is meant to reference
the prior state held by "she" before it was taken.
After saying no didn't work. If you re-read, you'll see
that the whole climax takes place at night, hence after the sunset.
I'm thinking of adding one more stanza in to give more back story.
Appreciate the comment


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