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Spend Well
To spend
in love's language
is to spend ''it'' wisely
for lovely kids
the night watches silently
you are breathless
so is she
spend the night
not with me
but her beholding
spend well
your hidden energy
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
scribbler
Tue, 2019-08-27 16:47
Hi loved
Any particular reason you capitalizes line 4?. Also you might consider changing "lovers'" to love's......don't know why, just seems better lol...........stan
lovedly
Tue, 2019-08-27 18:31
gracious Stan
at times it looks nice
to know
has been read
by poetry papa's
lol ha ha
Sparrow
Tue, 2019-08-27 18:42
Loved
Well one of your better presentations, not sure if the word Progeny is suitable for a night of well spending..
The word could be used as an outcome of such actions , But loved the piece anyway, Yours Ian ..
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
Eumolpus
Tue, 2019-08-27 20:54
an interesting take
telling your progeny to go with his beloved and make whoopee, rather than spend the night with you.
Why would he not do so. He could have dinner with you, and her for a long desert afterwards, no?
I don't see the conflict, but I like your libertine attitude.
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
lovedly
Tue, 2019-08-27 20:58
I feel the pleasures
Eumol as and when you visit me
but while u were reading
I was directed to abandon
PROGENY
which I did as asked by IAN