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All Eyes On Me

We all say every day
eyes are only windows
all know
This version is slightly different read it and you will know.
All eyes on me

All eyes on me

Just so beautiful
eyes are windows
through which you see
they also show

smile across the window
all passersby will know
that empty eyes love do blow

let all know
the eyes when they follow
or the final word they slow

whistle for me not, no more
my eyes now don’t see
I have gone
like the whistling wind
all must know

eyes now speak no more
what to show
mind's eyes remain back
in memories to glow
till you your own eyes
also let go
eyes no more glow

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Comments

I could not follow it clearly, but I like it anyway, especially for the atmosphere it creates. And its tendency to cause one to go into thought.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

smile across the window
all passersby will know
that empty eyes love do blow

let all know
the eyes when they follow

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