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Ignorance and Stupidity Abound
The song I learned:
Jesus loves the little children
All the children of the world
Red, brown, yellow
Black and white
They are precious in His sight.
Jesus loves the little children
Of the world.
Conservative’s Translation for 2019
Jesus loves the white straight children
Just the white children of the world
Pale, fair, snowy
Orange and white
Just they are precious in His sight.
Jesus loves the white straight children
Of the world.
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Structured: Western
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If this offends you, make better life choices.
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Jacksonville area, FL, USA
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Keats, Kipling, Carroll, Yeats, Tolkien, Shakespeare
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Pugilist
Thu, 2019-06-13 22:03
Thank you
I wrote this out of annoyance at the current situation in the US.
As a man of deep and abiding faith, I find the religious right to be a cancer on society.
Updated upon reflection and suggestion.
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Jonathan Moore
author commentEduardo Cruz
Thu, 2019-06-13 16:15
Pug
the title said it all, it is not just stupid people it is that they are a product of there up bring. and once this abnormal thinking is drummed into there brain it's all they know. they don't read the bible they get the knowledge second hand, because Jesus love everyone. I don't believe in God, but in college I wrote a paper on religion so I had to read may different bibles to make an informed opinion. but in my research I learned that they quote the bible from what they heard and not what they read. the thing about these bibles, when you read you end up interpreting in your metal sight.
I really like this write because of the pro and con attitude of brainless people.
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Pugilist
Thu, 2019-06-13 22:06
Thank you for the critique
Your thoughtful comments are appreciated and valued. It does my heart goo that you found items relateable, because, to me, this is not a faith issue, it's an integrity issue and the conservative camp in the US has lost all claim to any shred of integrity they had horded in a closet against the return of sane leadership.
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Jonathan Moore
author commentlovedone
Thu, 2019-06-13 20:02
I am quite dyslexic and stupid
some one loves
would imply one is living
won't it
one who lived and loved
would make me feel
intelligent
kindly educate me
many not only call me naive
but stupidly silly
otherwise
good is your poetry