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The Sower of Dream Wax

Submitted by quillsveinback on Tue, 2019-01-15 01:38

I would be the sower of dreams,
flossing the dead with new flavors,
spreading mirage matter on abandoned
walls. Better yet as a pair of eyes
rolling in the dark, beneath the lake's
syrupy tide, stained by the pyrite gold
of floodlights; a messy voyeur
a gaze which scalps the night.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

zebra

Fri, 2019-01-18 05:21

A beauty!!!!

weirdelf

Sun, 2019-01-20 12:00

Fuckin love that last line!

The poem was a tad ice-cream, albeit jet black ice-cream, before that line turned it into a dangerous work.

Onya, brother.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

quillsveinback

Tue, 2019-06-11 20:30

The Silver Surfer

did it, he was the first mythological God then replaced by fraud men and tricksters. That you enjoyed it flatters my folded heart.

The Sandman I am familiar with but ne'er a once did I read it.

JTA

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weirdelf

Tue, 2019-06-11 21:01

Only problem with the Silver Surfer was

despite the good story and mythology, not a surfer at all and those of us who ride the ocean on surfboards could not accept him at all.
It tried to plug in to a popular lifestyle but dismally failed in that respect because those who wrote and drew it had transparently never ridden a surfboard. Does that sound like smug self-alienation?
No. Really, if you have ever ridden a surfboard and got tubed you will know I am talking about a very real and distinct spiritual experience.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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The Sower of Dream Wax