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GETTING THROUGH THE NIGHT

I lay my head down late at night
after an exhausting day
then turn off the bedside light.
I'm too tired to even pray.

Thoughts keep racing through my mind,
memories of the day just passed,
muscles refuse to unwind.
Old aches assail me from the past.

My tossing wakens her from sleep
and she asks if I'm alright
as the clock hands slowly creep
in the wee hours of this night.

So I tell her that I'm fine;
she rolls over, hugs me tight.
Her touch soothes like some fine wine
like so many times before.
Her love will take me through the night.

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delete the line [like so many times before]. It doesn't rhyme and is superfluous. Maybe just go with;
Her touch is soothing, just like fine wine
Her love will take me through the night.
~ Gee.
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Hmmmm....I know it doesn't rhyme.....I'm gonna do something soon about that but I don't want whatever I do to lose the thought contained in that line which denotes that this is far from a one time thing

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I do understand what you are trying to achieve. ~ Gee.
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