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Honey Bitch Bound..... sexual content

Submitted by zebra on Fri, 2019-04-12 08:02

we met one night
hearts of fire
kisses sweet
passions dire

out came rope
and string we found
white gauze wrapping
honey bitch bound

kisses hot
mouths like butter
i tied her hard
her eyes did flutter

ankles to arms
head to feet
she started to sweat
her joints did meet

stressed and pink
i love her so
she looked up
and started to glow

oh you mean man
she said you brute
hurt me baby
am i not cute

i slapped her hard
on the face and the ass
bit her feet
she quaked and gasped

i used her mouth
oh she sucked and sucked
and licked with lust
and then got fucked

i love her ass
it was really fun
we loved and cumed
i am her sun

kisses torrid
i ate her like pie
for her love
i would gladly die

i tied her and bended
she arched and she folded
crushed her to pieces
and then re-molded

she cried and begged
oh i adore
and hollered and squealed
give me some more

all in a swirl
eyes crossed and diffused
bent out of shape
and begged to be used

love turned to passion
and passion to madness
i did terrible things
she kissed me with gladness

we consumed each other
let out all that we feel
couldn't help our selves
and thats how we heal

out came rope
and string we found
white gauze wrapping
honey bitch bound

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Last few words: 
sexual content....a poem of erato comatose lucidity
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Geezer

Fri, 2019-04-12 14:43

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I like the rhyme, the pattern and the overall feel of I. The whole thing is smooth and sing-song, so that the rhythm is well kept. Nice. ~ Geezer.
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zebra

Fri, 2019-04-12 15:41

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:) haahaahaa

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