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Museum of the Moon

Submitted by zebra on Tue, 2019-03-12 14:06

vampiric whore house
a fearful symmetry
of cleavers for something to love

opium addicted
pearly satin's copulate
a continent of curves
ovoid rectums and raw mouths
in a ritual of sadistic etiquette
drenching phallus tongued spit
like gales of flames
at a masochists invitation
for foot blooded kisses
and heated lopped breast

eager haunches thunder a malignant lust
fingering utopias anus cyclops
spreading winkling's dribbling
night operas
in a red cathedral of flicker hives
squealing euphoria's hemic arcade
with greased orgasms that split backs in two

fluting throats vomit chromatic fizz
and shrilling wombs flutter like bat wings pandemonium
in the museum of the moon

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Inspired by Minna Loy and vampires
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Wed, 2019-03-13 10:04

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I'm thinking that you don't need inspiration, but if you do, it should certainly be from a group called
Minna Loy and the vampires. LoL. Great stuff as always. ~ Geezer.
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zebra

Wed, 2019-03-13 13:00

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I really like prompts of my own choosing They do excite me to write and thank you so very kindly Geezer ;)

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Cloudthings

Thu, 2019-03-14 08:18

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I am a soft heart & tend to avoid violence in my reading matter, I suppose you enjoy writing it or you wouldn't have... I guess I'm trying to say I'm making an effort, but finding it difficult to not feel disturbed by much of this... maybe because I find most pornography degrading & this just feels like a litany of pornography for the sake of it. I see now why you might not enjoy poetry about trees? I am truly interested in widening my understanding & being more widely tolerant.

Over-all, I think you wield your language well & maybe I am having the reaction you are happy with (don't get me wrong, I'm no prissy girly swat, I have seen quite a bit of the tricky side of life, quite possibly that's more reason I don't invite it in unless I must?). I don't intend ANY offense saying this, I think you are wise enough to understand that, just letting you know how it lands... It isn't that it has sex or names sexual activities (if you can call it that) - it's that it's so aggressive & I can't help but wonder if it's poetry to just list all that down? I know you can write poetry, I've read enough of you, even if it's only a few, & it's quite possible that it is poetry to list them in this way & I just can't get past the unpleasantness of it? This is merely "raw truth", if you find it makes you cross with me, please don't attack me, just discuss it with me, I am open to different perspectives always.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

zebra

Thu, 2019-03-14 13:35

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Delighted to hear from you and no not in the least offended
It is not lost on me that my dark transgressive erotica is difficult for some perhaps and probably for many and most. Each persons true God is what lives in their hart and what is consummately sacred to them and since lust is sacred to me I've stepped outside the bounds of the leaden Victorian adoration for the agony of sexual restraint and given wanton lust a voice in this world. I don't much adhere to the narrow definitions of pornography because I've seen great art that is pornographic and yeah admittedly a lotta bad porn too

There is a great literary tradition of overt and stunningly sexual literature both ancient from the
Kama sutra through de Sade, the novels and philosophical writing of Georges Bataille, the Beat poets like Ginsburg, William S. Burroughs the god father of punk and many others till now.
I don't see any reason not to celebrate the thing that many people secretly harbor the most passion for before they have it beat out of them by the maniacal's of religious and social convention

You might like to know that there are important studies that indicate that those who indulge in paraphilias tend to be much more stable mentally. In other words sex lust and perversity is normative when one isn't socially engineered to betray and abandon ones primal needs

As for whether my writing is art; well thats always a matter of interest and opinion

lusts antidote
waterloo of the soul
annihilation point
the cadaver weeps

ie to turn from ones primal desires is a form of suicide and to embrace it is to embrace what is life giving and beautiful. Having said that people need to protect themselves from the truly unwanted

I fully support you in living your life as you wish reading what you like and ignoring what you don't
Thats about all the freedom any of us really have
So thank you for your kind inquiry about my work and what I believe
It is very appreciated !!!

Best Z :)

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Cloudthings

Fri, 2019-03-15 08:50

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I can't see anywhere that I didn't celebrate lust etc... I definitely do, it was the violence implied... lopped breast etc. I think a lot of men don't get that at least a quarter (1 in 4) of women in this world have been abused in early or later life (I know there are males who have too, but it is far more common for women). Lust & exploration is wonderful in "safe" conditions - I'm sure there are a few who enjoy the unsafe, but this crosses the line for me... I bless the men in my life that have respected this & helped me heal from my history as much as one may - it enabled me to be free to be lustful & celebrate sex. But it was men in the first place who visited coercion & worse to satisfy their own sexual drives without any care for a very young girl, & without taking responsibility for how much damage they had done on almost every level of life - 1 woman in 4 feel this to some extent, I just wonder if that enters your mind when you put this kind of sexual violence out there? Still no offense intended, again, just the raw truth & something for you to think about..

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

zebra

Sat, 2019-03-16 05:58

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Your point is well taken Anni !!!!1
CONTEXT:
Im married to one woman whom I adore going on 40 yrs who I assure you would freely claim that I have never so much as been anything but respectful and protective of her
I have 2 beautiful grown married daughters and 3 grand daughters and believe me I would not want to see one hair on their precious heads so much as out of place due to unkindness, disrespect or actual abuse of any kind to include that of verbal abuse never mind physical

RECONTEXT: Having said that all you have to do is search the web to see a menagerie of sexual perversities of both men and women on full display Studies sighted indicate that one out of every 6 of us experience paraphilias of some kind and those are just the people who would be open to admitting it Most hide this and sometimes even from themselves as it conflicts with their moral compass There are an estimated over 500 paraphilias In other words this desire phenomena is pandemic Check out the Japanese rope masters Kinbaku and Shabari This is very common in Japan
Japohttps://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_bondage#Kinbaku_vs._shibari

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paraphilia
Paraphilia (previously known as sexual perversion and sexual deviation) is the experience of intense sexual arousal to atypical objects, situations, fantasies, behaviors, or individuals.[1] Such attraction may be labeled sexual fetishism. No consensus has been found for any precise border between unusual sexual interests and paraphilic ones

Much of my poetry explores this subject and in my PF I briefly explain this
Context is important
As mentioned by Geezer I appreciate your respectful inquiry We are here to support each others creative process and understand both the product and innerworkings / motives of each other and not jump to conclusions and I for one appreciate that you have done that, so thank you!!!
Some of us are called to write dangerously
Best Z

NUTERED BY VANILLA
oh better not say that
mind of hell
tongue of heaven
better not think depraved
veiled demon
God watching
what will people think
am i good person
birthday face
shut eyed stiff
not dangerous, like a gun in the face

did i say the right thing
the knot of good, a slow strangle
frightened worms
robots wired like weaponized monkeys
and religion eaters
of Gods crumbs

can i evaporate
like a dead cat in a black box
better then tripping all over my self
strings attached with hooks
a relic of modernism,
and talking scapegoats hissing
apologizing to a faceless crowd of sea shells
and bagged heads, exhaling only

watch out what you say
in a free society

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Cloudthings

Sat, 2019-03-16 04:07

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In some ways there was no need to go into the discussion to justify those that enjoy altered (which doesn't necessarily mean coercive or violent) sexually normative experiences... I get it, I've lived wide in this life & seen much if not experienced lots - However I am very happy to hear of your wife & children & grandchildren & that there are women in this world you respect & have compassion for... That is really important to me. I worry that so many women are damaged by a very male driven sexual aggression.... However, this brings me to your last additional wtite which I found really interesting - It's bizarre actually... you could have been writing deliberately to the current big news in my country, my state & my region (& the world) - George Pell who has just finally been convicted of sexual abuse of a young boy, though we all know there were many others (I have met & talked with them myself)... In the courtroom his lawyer mentioned that it was ordinary "vanilla" style penetration... as if that made it ok (no paraphilia for Pell it seems)... He was a cardinal & top advisor to the pope so it's a really big deal... Anyway, through you write it kept making sense to me in that light... I get that it's unlikely it was, just mention out of interest. Some of your sentiment is wonderfully expressed here, I think you should pop it into the stream so I remember to get back to it... (gotta nick off now). Dinner to be sorted.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

zebra

Sat, 2019-03-16 06:28

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Admittedly its a thin line between fiction and reality Consensual play is the key and even that must have limits ....Writing facilitates the surrealism of the mind to find voice, I write for those who know that side of themselves and revel in it and for those who may discover that inexplicable thing that needs recognition for them to integrate the subconscious impulses and know its okay to be human
It is my experience that those who pretend to be all good and light are the ones most victimized by there shadow side.

yoo who its me
my name is Pinky Lee
with my hooks and cries
and dark blood skies

in the misty night
i dragged out their earthen coffins
legends of the despicable
resurrected them
fed and loved those darklings
had every conceivable union with them
their healing, my own
ive sexualized them
and found love
albeit twisted

To be adored
in a hidden embrace
i bestow upon you a poetic fantasy
while obsession takes hold

bind it not
nor let it bind you

My poems remain explorations of the subconscious erotic
If i where a film maker or a novelist you would see me telling a story; not judge me although i admit to my paraphilias
These poems are lunar anamorphic streams of consciousness from the deep chaotic subterranean glitz of transgressive impulses we all share
Read them if you dare...You might find that part of yourself that you don't want you to know about

Best Z

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Geezer

Fri, 2019-03-15 10:35

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to see a frank discussion of such a nature; without name calling and the call for another's head! I remember that Anni, was appalled at my "Killer" and was just as nice about it. I do believe that she did find a couple of his exploits amusing and managed to read them all the way through! Gosh! I really love this place! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Cloudthings

Sat, 2019-03-16 04:21

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& remember now - I am a softy - Somehow, things I read, particularly here, go in deeply with less filter because it is the realm of heart & vulnerability - I expect this may be a less common way to experience Neo... I used to write about having no skin (after I was grieving for my partner many years ago)... but probably I have never had very thick skin (as they say). I am easily haunted by unpleasantness (could be due to a relatively unsafe early life?) In any case, we all have our "thing" & I don't propose MY thing is more important than someone else's. But it's good to let people know if they want the truth, how things might land with some, & of course I have had a myriad of responses to my own writing to indicate that some found it too "nice" or "gushy" etc... As you probably remember.

I wonder how I'd cope with "Killer" now? I should go find it xx

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

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