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Eternity
the seduction of eternity
ice house Shekinah
sad hag
during the blood soil days
pets left on the dark side of the moon
a deluge of morality in a palace of tears
structures of consciousness under compression
the tongue of eternity
a veiled Eros licking
flickers a selfish dream serenade
pollen of discontent
like a pregnant superhero
dressed in a candy wrapper
treading a visionless ezoic brain
bugs
war zones of memes and genes
all matter is metaphor
near death objects
meteors of grinning spiked crowns
we are memetic plucked limbs
sulfurous dust
short lived bloated yolks, clawed minds
mice in a supermarket with tape worms
and a trade mark
we are something boiling
the bowels of eternity
graves of meat and mud
crucifixes in a screaming abyss
belly of shadows
Comments
quillsveinback
Thu, 2019-01-17 17:18
I love
most of these images, especially "the spiked crowns/meteor" one. You've obviously learned a lot from that odd root of Surrealism.
Thing is, they aren't economized in any particular way, Technique, all that friend!
JTA
zebra
Fri, 2019-01-18 05:19
Yes, I recognized it
Yes, I recognized the surreal strain immediately in myself through your riveting work Touched beyond measure!!!!!
As for your last comment can you be more explicit I think you mean the work could be better organized;
Technique??? I need to understand this better
quillsveinback
Fri, 2019-01-18 18:39
It is also
your choice: metrics, the leaning on of certain vowels--check out The Book of Forms by Alfred Corn
JTA
zebra
Sat, 2019-01-19 04:02
okay thanks
okay thanks
zebra
Sat, 2019-01-19 07:29
I thought free verse was free
I thought free verse was free of formal structure resembling natural speech Pls define leaning on vowels Can you give an example and show a qualitative difference between the structures of leaning and not leaning
Are we talking assonance. word segmentation as in various forms of prosody?
I am of not unfamiliar with the economy of language as in pairing down, streamlining
Is this what your referencing to?
Google, Amazon etc. produced no Book of Forms by Corn
How about
The poems heart beat A Manual of Prosody by Corn