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I wanted to love a poet,
Because I thought
Her binoculars tore
Through forests of furs
To capture vision
In her enlightenment,
I supposed deeper than
The well in between her thighs.

I wanted to love a poet,
But the depth of her shallow mind
Bore portholes that got me sinking
In the abyss of this depression.

I wanted to love a poet,
Because I saw
The beauty in her heart,
That was just an art,
As is beauty;
A clothing to dress an act.

I wanted to love a poet,
Because I thought
She'll weave my soul
With the same romance
She tampers with words.

I wanted to love a poet,
But I was wrong
To make her a deity,
So I crush every crush,
Knowing she was human all along,
With flaws,
And the imperfections of a lady.

I wanted to love a poet,
Forgetting we're all tools,
Used by muse
To project the beauty of art,
And nothing like winged angels
Sent to carry the world like an egg.

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really. I think it resonates with all of us who know poets.

perhaps consider the dropping the whole second stanza. Or changing at least

But the depth of her shallow mind

as depth is a word that feels "deep" and shallow mind is too telling, you want that the inference will be there for the reader without telling us.

But I think many will appreciate this poem. Nice one!

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

But Intended an ironical juxstaposition I don't know how well that effect took toll


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What a wonderful bitter poem.
I like the repetition, the idea, the conclusion of the poem.


I'm glad you loved it


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Love this too much.
I know poet works well, but don't know if poetess works better?
You absolutely know more.


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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