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Nutty Thing

Submitted by raj on Fri, 2018-12-07 13:36

beneath the mask
lies a guarded myth
for eyes to seek
then say Ah!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Sat, 2018-12-08 12:54

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I read this little piece in the morning. I read it later in the noon. I'm still trying to figure out the theme.....mmmm
Not sure even that the title helps.
Hint hint....

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raj

Sat, 2018-12-08 13:25

thanks for taking time to read...

this poem was inspired by a photo of walnuts on Neopoet's Instagram page...

this poem is therefore as much about Nuts concealed in a shell as too about pleasure a reader gets on decoding the abstract/sub text/between the lines message or even could be perceived by some as a veiled bride on the maiden night...so multiple perceptions in this...

the title Going Nuts = going crazy [in a good way] after a pleasant surprise

warmly....
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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chevyvent

Sat, 2018-12-08 13:49

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I sympathize with your dilemma. But everyone deals with temptation each his/her own way. Here's how I managed mine at some point far away and long ago:
Not by chivalry nor by protocol,
Our flirting ways seduced to abdicate
Tremors echoing through the inner soul
Searching for trespasses to vindicate,
Cling strong defiant, live, reverberate:
Hopelessly shackled not with chastity,

Mario Vitale

raj

Sat, 2018-12-08 13:53

for reading ...honestly i couldn't make sense and context of your comment..

thanks though for your time..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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lovedly

Sun, 2018-12-09 12:25

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could !!! be perceived by some as a veiled bride on the maiden night.
viewing the hidden interiors
of a bridegrooms anticipated delight ...

and this time say
I am right

raj

Sun, 2018-12-09 12:27

for reading and your comment....however it is not intended to be erotic...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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IRiz

Sun, 2018-12-09 22:53

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Hey Raj,
It is a real jewel.
The surprise of discovery of a new angle in a poem, a new depth in a character. A pleasure of learning.
I am not sure what would I say at the end Ah or Hmm.

IRiz

raj

Mon, 2018-12-10 05:26

thanks for your good words...always good to feel the pat on the back....

it' can be Ah ..AhHa or Hmmm as long as it is an exclamation...i did think about AhHa but then settled for Ah..

warmly...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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