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Catching The Mood of The Rain

I wonder what mood
has the rain!

Does it feel happy
To wash mother
nature's pain?
Does it feel sad
And fall as a sign
of complaint!

Or maybe it just goes
Mad because of
Man's insanity?

I wonder

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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Good idea to so animate the rain! Last stanza is problematic for me;

Or maybe it just goes
Mad because of
humanity's insane?

the syntax...correct would be "humanity's insanity" but that doesn't sound good. Then there's the problem for mad vs insane...colloquially they are both the same.
There are so many ways to say what it is obvious what you are trying to say, I would play with it bit more, maybe by describing the madness, with images, it could be so illustrated and not so directly presented.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

highly appreciate your feedback. Hope it reads better after the edit.

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the basic syntax now fits better. A short poem, but power packed!

(Sorry about the multiple posts, not sure how that happened.)

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thank you for taking the time Mark to comment and for the suggestion.
Much appreciated.

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good poem to imagine nature's mood..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

My pleasure. I'm pleased to know you like it.
Thank you.

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Appreciate the approval.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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being a poem based on imagination I feel "I wonder" is a good ending...it could also be

I wonder
while I wander
in the clouds..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I see your imagination is even works better. That's a lovely ending indeed.
Thank you

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As a newcomer this is probably a belated comment, but I love the theme of rain and mood, since they go together so well. My mood has seldom if ever not been affected by the rain, as well as by the wind. But enough about my mood! What is the mood of the rain?! Now I'll wonder and probably write poems about it! Thank you!

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