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Always Taken

My mother never liked slender girls.
“You know, she needs some meat on her bones.”
That was Ma, old school, gotta love her.
Slender was for me, just attractive.

My gut, when I first saw her jacket;
Twisted deep, warm, I’ll never forget.
Loved that long gold or blonde hair as well.
“Her hair is too stringy,” Ma would say.

Ma never liked the girls that I did.
Maybe avoidance was for my Ma.
Maybe it was that they never met.
Michelle caused both my knees to weaken.

She was a Mama too with Papas,
never met her but she had my love.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 


there is a guy I knew unmarried wanted to marry desparately
I asked him why then don't you
he confided
his mother was looking
for a suitable girl
rich but like a home maid/nurse
so that when she wanted a massage
she would
cook a meal as and when
sleep besides her at night

She had 7 years taken so far
couldn't be obliged

so now he has become wise
he ran away with a fatty
lives at her place mostly
when he comes home
shows his mom a sullen face
when will you find one for me
he weeps

moms r moms

Working from prompts can be tricky as ya never know where one may take you.
Like , write about falling in love with someone ya never met. Ha! Never happened but OH well that's creative license for ya lol
Thank you,

And that's how I see it,

author comment

I liked the theme...will return to see how you do the edits...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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