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Of The Dead
as a child i had a sense of before
i only a tenant in this world
i dreamt, i remembered
a place of light and freedom
of flying weightless
without a care
recurring reveries
of changeless drifting
but as i got older
my astral excursions
turned to thin air
much to hearts despair
i fell weighted to this terrestrial sphere
by thickened accumulations
of hard niches and obscurations
a delicate spark burdened
by sheaths of gnawing reason
engulfed in brutish struggle
at times
i obsessed
aching to go
back from where i came
maybe stepping in front of a speeding car
desperate to get home
where the dead
live it up
cadaverous child
a strewn tangle of little limbs
broken
on a country highway
who made a hard sacrifice
for a bigger life
where the very sensation of existence
was a floating ecstasy
like an atomized cloud puff
where the dead
are not dead at all
but enchanted children
living
with faces like suns
on the other-side of the looking glass
feet to the stars
in the arms of heaven
Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2018-11-24 18:26
Very good sense...
of the place between this life and the last/next. it sounds as though you are describing "Astral Projection" or "Reincarnation"! I love the almost light-heartedness in describing the desperation of wanting to get back to where the dead "live it up"! The whole of it, rather than being macabre, made it sound as though the end result was as exactly as intended, without regret! Your title and language made this simple, but not overly so and of course, I loved the theme! This one flowed well, from beginning to end. Nice job. ~ Geezer.
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zebra
Sun, 2018-11-25 04:43
Thank you very much Geezer.
Thank you very much Geezer. Glad you liked this. Very appreciated :)