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DEVORCE 2

Submitted by scooby on Thu, 2018-11-01 17:27

little does she know that she will have to choose
,when her parents get devorced which one she will lose
and little does she know that the alcohol she drinks
is the one thing that will put her on the brink...

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vandiemenspeak

Thu, 2018-11-01 22:58

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And relateable - this says a lot with so few words Scooby.

Thanks.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

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weirdelf

Mon, 2019-01-21 00:33

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Was the mispelling of divorce on purpose? Perhaps to make the child experiencing it seem younger?

Both really good, clear and important poems.

cheers,
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