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yes I have a lesson for my little brother
when you are my age your father is not gonna be with you mother,
and you need to know that this is not on you
its okay buddy that is how I felt too.

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Sounds like you are trying to comfort a little friend [someone you think of as a brother.]
It seems as though you have some experience and for that, I'm sorry. I know how it feels, and although it was many years ago, I still remember that I wondered if this is really how it is? Not like on TV. On TV, it was like Leave it to Beaver and Andy Griffith Show and... well... The Cosby's. This piece is simple and unsophisticated, but full of emotion. ~ Geezer.

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Divorce etc
will make this poetry
a Western normal History
Just see

where cultures are as diverse
as desert and sea

what can kids expect from
poppy and mostly
ultramodern mommies

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