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Fledgling flight.

When her flight clicks to a shut
Worm clutched
The chorus begins, that pronounces:
“Bring it in, in bring in!”
I am the more worthy,
I am the greater to sing
Out of this cacophony of chirrups
To me, to ME, you bring!

Survival is by numbers,
And those that sing their loudest worth;
Gain the fatter worms
Drawn out of the earth,
Arched across the sky in
A perpetual evolutionary flight,
By those who will soon outlive
Their wings.

And the young shall continue,
All a clatter clinking flutter,
Edging out into the morning light
We may capture them, if early,
In their fledgling flight,
And the earnest process again, begins.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Observing a constant returning, patient, feeding starling.
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Comments

Strong and shocking lines.
I like the image of those who outlived their wings.
It breaks my heart to imagine.

IRiz

They are actually nesting above my makeshift laundry! I try not to disturb them when they're active, which makes laundry a bit of a challenge. There are a profusion of birds that live around the little hut. Thanks for reading and seeing in all senses.

Cheers

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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Natures viciousness caught in perfect eloquence.
Worm clutched, so Pulitzer.
I love the writing, as if hell goes down like a milkshake

I love the phrase "hell goes down like a milkshake"! There's a poem in that itself. Oddly, they seem to be quite fussy about the worms, even alighting on the roof with one specimen, then seemingly unsatisfied, flying off to grab a bigger one.

Cheers.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

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