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With Relish
the Ferris wheel
picked us up
the bottle toss
was a ringer
the horses took a
victory lap
and our hot dogs
were topped
with relish
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Shadowdancer3349
Tue, 2018-10-02 18:11
Greg
sounds like fun pure and simple brings back younger days
gregwa8
Tue, 2018-10-02 18:30
love a trip to the fair!
love a trip to the fair!