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Hate haiku

Submitted by weirdelf on Sun, 2018-08-19 07:36

I will insert hate
which orifice is your choice
cry harder, nazi

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scribbler

Sun, 2018-08-19 09:40

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Nazis are already filled with hate and need no more inserted lol. Unusual Haiku

weirdelf

Sun, 2018-08-19 13:20

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thank you.
How could I resist the alliteration of Hate Haiku though?

Oh, and you are so very, very wrong. Only Americans think that the Socialist in National Socialists ie Nazi had anything to do with socialism. They practised no socialism whatsoever. They were nationalistic totalitarians. Amongst their first victims, even before the Jews, were unions. I don't blame you, all Americans are fed that disinformation.

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weirdelf

Sun, 2018-08-19 13:24

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I hate what makes me hate. skinheads, American warships in Sydney Harbour, Trumpkins, ignorami who blame foreigners for taking jobs that the people who got voted in actually took, wilful ignorance in the information age, blah blah

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lovedly

Sun, 2018-08-19 22:26

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weirdelf

Sun, 2018-08-19 20:58

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I do.
Fuck hippy-dippy lovey-dovey forgivey shit. Millions died stopping them in WW2.
Now Trump encourages them.
It is not free speech it is hate speech.

If you gave real critique in plain English you would gain some respect from me, Lovedly.

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raj

Mon, 2018-08-20 05:53

pretty venomous/outrageous haiku making no bones about who the subject is...deservedly so...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

weirdelf

Mon, 2018-10-22 01:23

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raj.
Your nation has been a victim of hateful British imperialism, and I know you understand that not wanting to hate, it is hard not to hate the hateful.

cheers,
Jess
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IRiz

Mon, 2018-08-27 14:18

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You have chosen a traditional form, which is not the best for your purpose.
I agree Nazism is a movement that deserves the strongest feelings. The crimes in the name of it still hurt people even if most of it is in the past.
But some past simply doesn't go away.
Somehow your statement with this rare word for holes, I believe it has Latin roots, sounds too moderate even if it has a word HATE.
If you use hate, then i want you to spit, and curse and be brutal and use simple words.
On the other hand,
maybe because they hate, we should tell them that we live, love, and let them rott in unrest for the rest of time.

IRiz

weirdelf

Tue, 2018-08-28 22:38

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and they scream 'free speech' whenever they are attacked.
So I will fuck them up when they are not talking.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Sparrow

Wed, 2018-08-29 03:50

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There you go again
Hating instead of loving
Your reason is good.

La La Love you Bru!

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weirdelf

Wed, 2018-08-29 06:13

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There is no love for those shits. Only death.

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Jess
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Sparrow

Fri, 2018-10-19 18:44

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I only wrote a haiku, Maybe I should cuss a bit but a Haiku is supposed to be seasonal, does this mean you is only going to kill them if the season is right.
Damn what am I thinking, it is open season on them anyway..
Take care my Bru, Loves you ..

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zebra

Fri, 2018-10-19 11:21

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\Why only insert it, resort to witchcraft, move their mental furniture around....terrorize the terrible...let them feel being Jewish on the way to their horror ...let them see their precious children die ghastly, their blood turned to red ice after boiling and knitting their lips to the anus of Donald trump and read from the book of doom or invoke the bigger badest anti Satan Satan and a dancing bone saw etc. etc. etc..... oh I forgot its a haiku ;)
I'm a new idiot .....greetings

weirdelf

Mon, 2018-10-22 01:30

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Spot on zebra.
Didn't I see you describe yourself as a housewife somewhere? I thought you were female. Not that it matters. I think the interminable acronym LGBTIetcetc could quite simply be replaced with HuGSS (Human Gender Sexuality Spectrum). Which is totally inclusive.

I say it's ok to hate the hateful because they make me hate them and I don't like hating. Yeah, I will fuck them up at every chance. From pub brawls through political protest and civil disobedience to activism drawing the line only at killing. I will not kill.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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zebra

Mon, 2018-10-22 06:05

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As far as my house wife LGBT thing, its my dirt cheap Halloween costume to get into lez parties I do look good in black lamet and pearls except for the over build biceps, adams apple and unruly ankles
When I pass as a woman I go to tipping the velvet parties and boy are they surprised when they see I have dick. I never know whether there gonna fight over it in a tongue tangled brawl or throw me the fuck out :)

weirdelf

Mon, 2018-10-22 06:20

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though I somehow expect tipping the velvet to be a tad more elegant. No doubt a bisexual prejudice. [grins].

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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zebra

Mon, 2018-10-22 08:06

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Well I have a girl friend who is bi and she uses the term among others, like drooling slit :)

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