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"Feelings Of Love "

There in the evenings darkened sky
An old moon struggled to light the heavens
It is the same moon that sends its light to you.
There when you look up we see the same

The moonbeams give no warmth to us
Yet as it is seen by us both at the same time,
It seems to smile, and warm our ways
In that instant it has joined our feelings

In the knowledge that it joined us together
In that same instant without a mention of time.
Glow on old moon, you are a quiet to my soul. .
There I can see love reflected in your glow

A reflected messenger of my love for you
Now I love you more than I can say..
A reason to love is there for all to see
When joined in the heavens above..

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Just an August jotting..
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You have nicely captured how in a sea of humanity two souls seek each other to discover love

makes you a strong contender for winning the heart of the judge of this contest...

best wishes..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Many thanks for your visit, this is just a jotting from my keys to add to the August competition.
I am so glad that you liked it, hope the judge is a lady lol,
Take care out there and my best wishes to your family, as always,
Yours Ian

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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raj has inklings
he tells who will win
Besty
I shall have to think

I feel the heat of you thinking young poet lol, Take care now you have a target to reach and pass so I will wait awhile.. Take care and know we all walk under the same stars, even they change.
Yours as always Ian ..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
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but you will need to amend
so I shall post towards the end
little chance for you to improve
hat trick I must
Moms smiles
missed
then the special mention poem
and this time summerly fun
and
now my lover one
stand behind veiled stage
silently waiting

My you are going to have to pull the stops out, I daren't edit this one and make it perfect as it wont be fair to the others.
Your Mom walks with you always..
As does mine, I am nearly alone now I have just one Sister left in this world, mum and Dad are with them on the other side so that makes eight there and us two here Oh! and our Brother John that never walked the Earth but is there with them all in Spirit. Loved, you are never alone just whisper their names and there they will be.. Take care yours Ian ..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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The other side
there is
NO OTHER SIDE
I have been in 1977
couldn't find one
so empty handed I returned
to this EARTHLY HEAVEN
Thanks
Loved sends to all GOOD WISHES
all sides side by side
Ian Be bold you and i will each other follow
who'll go first none know
till then abide with me
will ye

Thank you for your visit, this is just for the August comp so that Loved doesn't win again lol.
A great welcome to Neopoet.
Yours Ian ..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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Many thanks for your visit I had put two on the comp page so I ended up removing one..
I hope I have chosen the better of the two lol.
I just write to make up the numbers most times but they are still reasonable writes..
Thanks again, Take care out there,
Yours Ian ..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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