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Serendipi-tea

Submitted by gregwa8 on Mon, 2018-07-16 16:55

I happened upon you
like Shennong
the Emperor of China
who boiled water
by the Sinensis tree

you fell unexpected
in my cup

and the rest
is like thousands of years
of history

world changing summits
and sagas of trade
and private afternoons
over tea

that one falling leaf
has led to a million times
of falling for each other

steeping
sipping
relaxing
and reviving

the story of tea
feels like the opposite
of chance

so too
the serendipity
of you and me

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chevyvent

Mon, 2018-07-16 22:57

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On your unique journey with words I'm pleased to come upon your piece with enthusiasm,
This remarkable journey holding forth the torch as if a warrir with the pen. You have touched my heart in a specific way to keep writing myself such engaging craft;
Thank you for this experience.

Mario Vitale

gregwa8

Tue, 2018-07-17 00:37

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thanks, chevyvent! glad to stoke the fire!
greg

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Rula

Tue, 2018-07-17 03:11

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and a well brewed piece.
Indeed! I appreciate the deliouse sip.

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Sparrow

Tue, 2018-07-17 03:27

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One of the best reads about Tea for a long time, thank you, this workshop some fun writes, that has brought out some great pieces, and is a great Idea,
Yours Ian..

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