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Dawn 21 Jun 2018

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2018-06-21 16:01

How will I know
if I don't wake up
at dawn
that a fresh twilight
has been born

who will say
where I've gone
without seeing the coming
of a lovely morn

Is there any power
which can in advance me warn
tomorrow for me
there will be no blessed morn

and

folks I leave behind
only will face
the morning rays of sun
and
then their loss mourn
as their lovely son
has gone

So before that ever happens
let me say

MEDITATE today
tomorrow may be too late

adapt with life today
let us pray....
kneel towards the East or West
before the sun does set
life is short and sweet
you bet!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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raj

Thu, 2018-06-21 16:09

Good message here Lovedly straightforward without diluting it with unnecessary additions or deviations
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raj (sublime_ocean)

lovedly

Thu, 2018-06-21 17:50

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raj _ocean
for you lovely comments
rendition

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Sparrow

Thu, 2018-06-21 19:27

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Being the longest day for us up north, just remember that all day the sun is rising for someone or setting for others.
A good thoughtful write, if you don't see the sun rise or become aware of the dawn, then you will join another place that is as you wish it to be always.
Journey on young Bard and know that the change in places will be smooth as it always is, only those left at the station will have tears in their eyes,
Yours as always, Ian ..

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lovedly

Thu, 2018-06-21 21:29

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and ROSES FROM Neos
good bad rubbish
rubbed away
lol ...stan will also say
the boss man
hurray
as he would have finally won
that day
UNKNOWN
but still far away
thanks for the tissue
I AN&

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