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Heart Is All I Can Give

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2018-06-08 15:39

Heart Is All I Can Give

Very beautifully
folks put across
the qualities of their hearts

but like the darkness
beneath a candle
we are ever in search
and
land up in lurch

when we return home
we discern our ground
where happiness
peace and love
all can be found

with all in love around
on our very own ground..

My heart palpitates for all poets
where can diamonds be ever found
unless you come here
to read poets extremely sound

How many loving sweetly
beating ones
ah sincere ones here abound
come and join us
in our own ground

to hear our lovely vibrating
melodious sound

All eyes look for guys
like us around
to enjoy the music
of love so very sound

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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gregwa8

Fri, 2018-06-08 23:31

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I like the line "but like darkness beneath a candle we are ever in search." cool image and poetic concept. the light doesn't reach everything, does it? we have the need to find the light, but there are pockets of darkness, even when we light a candle. very interesting! i might write something based off of that.

lovedly

Fri, 2018-06-08 23:54

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this into a song
is it worthy off ur pen

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scribbler

Sun, 2018-06-10 22:50

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We'd all be much poorer without good love poems wouldn't we? Last line in second stanza could use a bit of thought as it's a bit vague (at least to dim wits like me). Enjoyed......stan

lovedly

Sun, 2018-06-10 23:00

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the wondering and an extra typo L
were superfluous
I was also quizzing what was wrong..

thanks for indirectly telling me softly
me I am a dim wit
but witty perhaps
lol will do
u know I ain't so

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