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Safe Place

Submitted by T. Harmonee on Tue, 2018-05-15 08:14

I stay hidden away
From the unknown
Tucked beneath the covers
Where one thing is certain,
It’s dark.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Rula

Tue, 2018-05-15 09:50

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thought T. Harmonee, but if this is true, don't stay there for long , just an advice.

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T. Harmonee

Tue, 2018-05-15 10:50

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Just a poem inspired by a feeling I and everyone else naturally feels about things that are new.
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"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou

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raj

Tue, 2018-05-15 14:31

I echo comment of Rula

I feel there is no place for "away" in line 1
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Eumolpus

Tue, 2018-05-15 17:55

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and something you enjoy reading over several times. Has just the right amount of thought-fullness, humor, and irony. Nice!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

tyro

Wed, 2018-05-16 15:24

a real little gem, so many connotations flow from here

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

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