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Understudy Buddy

Submitted by Duke.Raoul on Sat, 2017-11-04 13:35

under the microscope: Let's examine
unavailable, classes evading
unstocked pantry for feast or famine
under-studied, (reflected in grading)
under construction: mental blockading
unfocused on visions he should observe
unmasked after years of masquerading
unfaithful servant, unwilling to serve
uncanny abilities to un-nerve
unquestioning, (not very quizzical)
unswinging strike, (never could hit the curve)
unconcerned with the metaphysical
unprepared for any upcoming quiz
underachieving. He is what he is.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing

Comments

Ja Ja

Sun, 2017-11-05 09:58

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Appears your understudy buddy
Needs a lot of work
If all he does
Is his duties shirk

Interesting piece, thank you

Geezer

Thu, 2018-03-15 09:45

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Apricot MkY and was struck by the word-play. So I came to read more of your work. I like the continuity and the rap sounding pace. You certainly have a way with words. I am going to go read the rest of your works. ~ Geezer.
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