Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

To IRiz (the lady of Sunku)

Submitted by Rula on Sun, 2018-03-11 01:52

Iris
Royalty
Faith and valor

Iris
The Heaven's
Bridge to the Earth

Iris
A lady
In Sunku form

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
A dedication to (Iriz). I found the name so close to one of my favorite flowers, the iris, so I thought I'd put it all in the vase of Sunku. Hope you all enjoy it.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

Comments

lovedly

Sun, 2018-03-11 09:30

lovedly's picture

i can only
IRiz count as two
rest tell me Rula
would you

Rula

Sun, 2018-03-11 10:33

Rula's picture
Volunteer badge

This is how I hear the words. Each syllable is created with one VOWEL SOUND

Ir/is
Ro /yal / ty
Faith /and / va /lor

Ir / is
The / Hea /ven's
Bridge / to / the / Earth

Ir/is
A / la /dy
In / Sun/ ku / form

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment

lovedly

Sun, 2018-03-11 12:16

lovedly's picture

now pleas also see my sunku posted
sllbiiiii!!!!

IRiz

Sun, 2018-03-11 13:22

IRiz's picture
Volunteer badge

Hello Rula!
I am speachless. Thank you for your wonderful poem concluding our workshop. Workshop that was enriched by your presense and talant.

I have chosen the penname just based on my first name initial and a last name fused together.
With Russian accent it does sounds like Iris,(a name of a Greek godess messanger that connects people) because we have a tendency to soften consoenants at the end of the word.
It is a very poetic member of the Olimpus.
I relate to her because I wanted to bring messages of love and kindness to the world and help to connect people together. Neopoet is a great means for the purpose.
I am looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Sincerely yours, Irene Riz.

IRiz

Rula

Sun, 2018-03-11 16:48

Rula's picture
Volunteer badge

dear. Happy to know that you like it.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.