What's lazy about this one? I love the "as" and "as I" parts of the poem. They really challenge the way we read, making us read slowly, and challenge the way many people would think of a simile, expanding on what it could be. The rhyme isn't consistent, but I think that fits, just like the changing shore at the beginning of the poem. Your words gave it purpose instead of just being a whim/laziness.

I also like the way the reader is made a part of the poem with the use of "you". The word order and rhyme of the line "Five swivel wheels a weight to bear" also seem like a perfect little homage to Yeats' "The Lake Isle of Innisfree" (Nine bean-rows will I have there"). "Food clothed in mosses green" is also unusual and beautiful at the same time, my favorite combination.

Maybe what you think is laziness is poetry coming with the ease of your skill and talent! That's what I think.

If I could suggest anything, it would be to take another look at "Hard surface that would hold an elephant". Something about it doesn't sound quite right to me. Maybe it doesn't feel right because in the previous lines the shore was changing, so I have a hard time imagining it being compacted at the same time, logically, but the sound of the line is also harsh in a way that doesn't match the rest of the poem. Maybe it could be clarified (if this is how you feel) that the tide/waves change? That would fix the logic for me. Then as for the elephant line, maybe shortening it would do the trick. What do you think of:

Cold sands compacted
hard surface that would hold an elephant --> enough to hold an elephant

Hope this helps,

Kelsey