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SunKu 4 Workshop
Our love
Like winter’s
Dead twiggy trees
Two ships
In the night
Missed each other
The search
For our love
Halted long ago
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Comments
IRiz
Thu, 2018-02-15 08:37
I love your poem
I was thinking about how many stanzas are good for Sunku. Three felt somehow the best.
By writing longer stream you add a dreamy, contemplating touch to the form.
It is a free form and I respect your choice.
I like the way you increase the size of the gap between your characters
Thank you for sharing your poem
IRiz
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2018-02-16 01:36
Three stanzas good
When I write I get carried away when it’s a new form.
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