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SunKu 1 Workshop

Fighting
To be me
Ain’t that easy

People’s
Opinions
Got it twisted

Shaming
Lost it’s punch
Went straight pass me.

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Comments

the composition, the rhythmical flow, the alliteration you have it all
plus i relate to the content very much

IRiz

A very fun workshop

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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author comment

So good to read this. Short form being your forte no wonder you picked up the threads of Sunku so quickly. Looking forward to red more.

I think opinion is 4 syllabi..i may be wrong..

Regards...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Glad you like it. I’ll be writing more as my 24 hour is up lol
I think o·pin·ions is three tho.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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I agree about the count. Also I feel that the precise count is not always possible and not always important.

IRiz

I had mentioned that I could be wrong in the syllable count and now stand corrected...

Regards...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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