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#haiku 6

a wren flaps away
beak full of juicy meal worms
for fledglings revel

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Yes Molly78 ,you are totally right and I thank you so much for this comment.I appreciate it.

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Vivid imagery created by you Marvel in this Haiku....a pleasure to read it...

regards..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks so much raj, I appreciate your comment.

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Thanks so much raj, I appreciate your comment.

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if you haven't visited the Forum topic of IRiz as yet in which she is proposing an even more trimmed form, I suggest you visit it...likely to interest you...

Regards...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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