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Political Pawns:
No morality
Dealing with duplicity
Loss of Sovereignty
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Client states prostrate to alien dictates
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2018-01-09 08:47
more truth
if you can make the form work, would be-
No morality
Not dealing with duplicity
Will cause Loss of Sovereignty
cheers,
Jess
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OriginalRhyku
Tue, 2018-01-09 13:09
Jess
I like your version - it is clearer - although the Rhyku requirement of 5-7-5 syllables will not be met.