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SIMPLE PROMISE
Well, I guess that I could say
I'll meet you in Paris in the spring
or some romantic place far, far away.
Now that would really be something.
Or I could gift you a diamond broach
heart shaped with sapphire in the center.
Such a gift would be beyond reproach
on a day like this at start of winter.
Perhaps I could write you a love sonnet
about passion or emotions bold
envelope it with a wax seal on it.
For such things I fear I am too old.
So instead let's meet at our birch tree
the one which has the river view
with initials I carved carefully
and there I'll give my love to you.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Eumolpus
Mon, 2017-12-18 22:39
very nice thought
and well done, simple and nice. Who could not relate to it?
(But, I'd also love to go to Paris in the spring! )
..
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
scribbler
Tue, 2017-12-19 22:40
hello
Always good to see you've dropped by. I'm pleased you like this quick scribble
lovedly
Thu, 2017-12-21 01:56
For such things I fear I am too old.
For such things I fear not
coz I am too bold.
then to all hags also Stan you will be sold till end of life we desire so all over again then for a rebirth hope all else is silliness behold give not away you hold say this and that and say Lovedly just told now like olden days you I must hold
squeeze your bones
lovedly
Thu, 2017-12-21 02:05
kindly store it in safe custody till i can post it for thee
Meek hearted never Lovers make
For such love like things I fear not
Coz
I am too bold.
then to all hags also friend
you will be sold
till end of life we desire so
all over again
then for a rebirth hope
all else is silliness
behold
give not away your hold
Say this and that
and say Lovedly just told now
like olden days you I must hold
squeeze your bones
and sure enough you will fumble
a wow
from one really old...