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For Esker

Submitted by lonlyhrtsclub13 on Mon, 2017-12-11 21:56

We spoke in verse
A language unique to us
Dancing through the darkness
Dust to dust

Through lyric and rhyme;
Once upon a time, we were close
Your wisdom and experience
I will always treasure

Journey on, dear Mr. Wolf
May your passage be well
Fly high with flowing ink
In the sky, write on, fly high

Until we meet again….

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Geezer

Tue, 2017-12-12 16:10

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Countless ink implies singulars that can be counted. Maybe use flowing ink?
Otherwise, another fine tribute to someone who is sorely missed.
~ Gee.
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lonlyhrtsclub13

Tue, 2017-12-12 17:31

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I like the use of flowing much better. Now he can write endlessly...will definitely miss him

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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Barbara Writes

Wed, 2017-12-13 08:33

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He will be missed

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Seren

Thu, 2017-12-14 00:25

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So many tribute poems he would've loved reading them and leaving his poem comments. He will be so very missed.

Biggest hugs we all have our memories of him and he's left us the gift of his words.

All the tributes are a reflection of the wonderful person he was and the incredible talent he had.

Love J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Thu, 2017-12-14 08:15

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talented man was Esker
his poetry will glisten
like white tusker
and yes
for ever
he was a great fan of mine
one above many a GOLDMINE

His poetry was abs Divine
shall for years shine
O poet you were so
FINE

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