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WATER IS LIFE

An enemy of none.
Like a fountain dispersing
All around ,side by side.
The pure liquid ,
That gives birth to life.
My heart is craving,
My spirit need more.

Only a drop can save a life,
Even a little wet gives hope.
The an arthropod wants most.
Like an infant see it ,
Cries until it’s given to him.
Through the door of a soul,
It saturate and be sustained.
For water is life.

Like a fall from a mountain, down the valley.
The animals and Aves, All must desire.
The trees and grasses seems green,
The ectothermic asylum it is.
For the earth is full of living things and none.
For water is life

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water is definitely life Simon, like your choices of words

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

always will i remember that thanks.

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Truely water has no enemies.Whoever siezes to befriend water begins a journey to the hearse.Thanks for sharing Simon.

i like your comment, thank you so much.

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