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OOOOOOO Marvelous metaphorical poetry

AHHHHHH OOOOO oooooo Marvelous metaphorical poetry

How happy am I
that ere I leave the world
for my final sojourn
I have come across
a wizard of poet tree in you

alas my ego has since been buried
I am no poet

I thought I was married to poetry
composed by no one else like me
now I am just a seedling
reading thee

my roots need to go deep
ere I weep
upon the days since gone
a narcissistic poet in me
succumbs

now I am done
ego has been abandoned

Lovedly is now free
as the winters cold breeze
to slap upon nude, naked trees
and sing a soulful song
be happy
all
now accept your poetry

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shine and the water flow, that will help your poetry grow.
An ego can overshadow
and prevent the leaves from receiving the sun
Narcissism can soak up the water
and prevent the growth of roots
Hence, the stem cannot support the plant
and it will fall over.

You have all the sun and water that you need for the proper growth
Bury that ego and the narcissism and you will have a marvelous plant
that will bear fantastic fruit! ~ Gee.
P.S. I like your title!

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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

a recent departure in my closest family *
has helped me shed my
EGO
and now let narcissism also flow
as you all help Lovedly grow

thank you so muchlee
I am still Lovedly
o my Gee
*You missed poetrys three

author comment

whatever is happening in your soul both a profound sadness and great joy.

I think you probably know the classic stages of the mystic on his journey, and the dark night of the soul to illumination.

This poem is a visit there

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Birth -Life - Death the three inevitable/occurrences

Born by collusion of two ...NO Control

LIFE is what you make of by your own mind's resolution
use your brains or use other's
to help yours rust...It is just a string connecting two...

DEATH ===The ultimate finality of all that seeds into life ===INEVITABLE 100 PERCENT

LIFE'S COMMAS NOW END IN A FULL STOP
All else is faith and imagery
REBIRTH OR NOT ..ALL WHAT!
NONE KNOWS IT .
nor ever WILL
We all are electromagnetically and chemically controlled humans/animals/trees solar powered minds
and
each one is an ENTITY
since ages gone and ages hence
but CHANGE IS THE ONLY CONSTANT
human minds with Time constantly change =INEVITABLE IT IS

author comment

Birth -Life - Death the three inevitable/occurrences

Born by collusion of two ...NO Control

LIFE is what you make of by your own mind's resolution
Use your brains or use other's
to help yours rust...
It is just a string connecting two...

DEATH ===The ultimate finality of all that seeds into life ===INEVITABLE 100 PERCENT

LIFE'S COMMAS NOW END IN A FULL STOP
All else is faith and imagery
REBIRTH OR NOT...ALL WHAT!
NONE KNOWS IT.
nor ever WILL
We all are electromagnetically and chemically controlled
humans/animals/trees
Solar powered minds
and
each one is an
ENTITY
since ages gone and ages hence
But CHANGE IS THE ONLY CONSTANT
Human minds with Time
constantly change =INEVITABLE IT IS

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