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NAKED Trees (November Contest)

Submitted by Kent on Mon, 2017-11-06 23:57

Why do you choose to take that form?
Oh you this beautiful thing!
What you seed, are beautiful and attractive.

But we humans are disrespectful.
Only if you could cover them!
But you choose to uncover them

You not greedy like the humans
What a unique being you are!
Why that form, I ask again?
Or maybe you choose to disguise like that
You really don’t look NAKED to me.

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November contest : Naked trees

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Kent

Tue, 2017-11-07 17:02

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yeah! the secret the trees choose to keep to their self

All who wonder ,are not lost!

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lovedly

Tue, 2017-11-07 11:50

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but only trees have yearly rings
ours we give to our
lovely lovings

scribbler

Tue, 2017-11-07 13:29

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Why take that form? It has always amazed me how the random growth of twigs and limbs still co-ordinates to make a thing of beauty. Good luck in contest and please put (November contest} next to tile to make it easier for monthly judge to spot.......stan

Kent

Tue, 2017-11-07 16:59

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ok. thanks alot

All who wonder ,are not lost!

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