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All Hallow's Eve...

For ghouls and ghosties all alike
All Hallows Eve, a favorite night
You should see them out on the road
Oh man, they give you such a fright

There's Kylee and Kote all dressed up
A killer-chicken and psycho- bunny
They want to scare the pants off from you
Don't laugh too loud, but it's kinda funny

Alyssa is a unicorn
Spencer Pixachu lightning-head
Baby Chance is Elmo laughing
He's so cute when dressed in red

Whatever happened to Frankenstein
The Wolfman and all of that?
The monsters and the vampires bloody
The witches and their crazy bats

Now, it's shiny super-heroes
The robots are what's new
Princess Ice and fuzzy stuff
I'm not so scared, are you?

Give them candy so they won't trick
Take their pictures and say ahhhh
At least I didn't see a killer-sheep
I would laugh at a scary Baaaa

I guess that I will be afraid
Of a chicken with a knife
A psycho-rabbit can be a scary thing
If it tries to take your life

So watch out for scary children
Don't laugh too long or hard
You may see some weirdo shit tonight
Coming across your yard

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Structured: Western
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This one is for my grandkids!
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Wait til you see the girls costumes....costumes certainly have changed. Good rhyming and descriptions

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

it's got me thinking over and over,it's nice and cool,thanks for sharing it with us.

I'm glad that you liked it. Do you have a holiday like Halloween there? - Geezer.

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So cute! I hope the grandbabies get to hear it read to them in a spooky voice and love it.

If you're open to revisions on this one, one tiny spot made me stumble. Something about "on the streets" didn't seem to sound right no matter how many times I reread it. Maybe "in the road"?

Hope you and your family have a wonderful time! It's always hard having Halloween fall on a school night.

Kelsey

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Enjoyed having grandpa come to their party dressed up and help them put together their skull lamps.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

and read it and you are right. I think the change makes it better.
~ Gee.
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