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September contest runner up
There are times when just a tiny difference is evident between a contest winner and the second place. This month was one such and the difference was so slight that it has been decided to announce an honorable mention for another fine poem and poet. So thank you loverly for your excellent entry :
.September CONTEST
Submitted by lovedly
An Autumn Come Home
You made me feel
as the young woman indeed
in the Garden of Eden
nude absolutely
No fear of Adam’s spear
he was meant to so tear
But youth has since evaded
we have been with burden loaded
The leaves and petals
have all withered away
come autumn now our way
smear all fragrance away
all colorful hues go too
whom, does autumn bare
as if she was another one
of his ware
We all love to see ourselves
in a mirror
like a tree
abandoned of all leaves
wrinkles left only...
Am I not depicting autumn?
Autumnally
as it is now coming
A lover of naturality
one time beauty
that I be
Wow autumn it’s me...
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Comments
lovedly
Mon, 2017-10-02 14:46
thank you Stan
and
all others too
The young one deserved it
much more
THANK YOU
ALL
scribbler
Mon, 2017-10-02 19:16
Thank you
For a quality entry
author commentlovedly
Mon, 2017-10-02 20:21
thank you Stan
Kindness pays more
than a few poetic words
enmeshed
autumn has come
I will post my second one
for just some more fun
thanks lol
lovedly
Wed, 2017-10-04 19:16
I BOW!!!
I am indebted to
Geezer
Ian
jess
Serendipity
Stan
in
ALPHABETICAL ORDER
to have polished a charcoal
into a diamond,
a machine gunner
to a sniper
Neopoeter!!!
amen
No need to thank my well wishers
I only
B O W
Loved then
Lovedly now
Geezer
Thu, 2017-10-05 12:47
You have reached...
new levels Lovedly. I am glad that you have applied yourself so diligently. That is what has made it possible. ~ Gee.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Thu, 2017-10-05 14:47
Thanks a mighty Geezer
I was scanning my past record
and have been so thrilled
you have been reading me as
Loved also
now over six years or maybe so...
As per
themoonman's
advice
I have modified two lines for future readers
'No fear of Adam’s spear
he was meant to so tear'
as
''No fear of Adam’s
spear
he was meant to sow tears'''....(the sexiness has gone now...)
You may visit the
ORIGINAL
as amended
grateful thanks
I composed
hat trick
have u scanned it!
sewie smalls
Sun, 2017-10-08 07:07
Congratulations lovedly
Your entry was lovely
lovedly
Sun, 2017-10-08 13:50
and thank you
Congratulations
coming from a winner
are so Lovely
thank you
meet you again
in the RED WAGON OCT CONTEST
IF YOU PERMIT
another young one has posted
a Winner already
depends on moods of the judgy
but go see.....
Sparrow
Mon, 2017-10-09 04:13
Loved
You is so lucky that I have a holiday booked for November. Taking my second place prize is OK this time and well done.
Hope you enjoy the prize I usually have to go on a sea trip when I win second, did Stan say where he is sending you????
Anyway you enjoy it wherever it is,
Love to all, yours Sparrow..
.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Mon, 2017-10-09 11:52
thanks Ian
no second prize
only
CONSOLATION
a balm for broken hearts
A warm kind
HON MENTION
some drawn attention
as yours Ian
we have sailed together these passed 6 years
stay aboard still
but not STILL!!!!
More poetry post I will ...
Sparrow
Mon, 2017-10-09 19:25
Loved
As the sand runs down,
into its next exit place,
we can hold the universe
to ransom with our words.
There in the swirling masses
of positive energy
we will form another place to play.
Never stay your hand
when grasping the quill,
find a memory or friend
to hold your point of view.
There also in the whispers
of that thing you call time,
is a nothing that is outside of the now.
Dwell with us in this now
write with your quill or tap on keys,
life swirls away at speed with great ease.
In your words to us here on this distant site.
Let the spirit wander,
that the words be pure
and the intent others eyes to secure.
Lift the dreamer high,
let your form be that of perfection,
if not so then toil toward that place.
Take care young Bard,
and know we walk together.
Take the path less travelled,
as the other is where many have had to return,
Yours Ian ..
.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Mon, 2017-10-09 21:21
taponkeys that's what I do always and instantly you edit mostly
you equate me with an
E A G L E
why will I lower my
SIGHTS
from high!
Sigh Ian you make me
FLY SKY HIGH BUT
IT'S THE RED WAGON on the earth
NOT AIRPLANES
YOU serviced 1942 on wards
High I shall once again fly
this time may be HIGHER THAN high
Hope no HM will dismiss me
to please
my wandering mind's
red what....
I will soonly release...
young bard does promise