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“Shadow Days”

I have walked in days just gone by
that threw shadows at my feet.
The sun felt cool as did the world,
was this all my feelings
now that it was getting cool.

Why did the those others
that held my hand as time fled,
leave me in this mind set,

I wonder why?

So it came to me as I looked around,
at the long shadows on the ground
That most of them were cast,
by the things that were behind me.

The path ahead shone with hope
That I could once again see.
I still have to find these things
I have been looking with eyes closed

The world will not show its self
to those who close their eyes
To feel the world and not see
is only half of what should be.

So I have opened my eyes
at the way ahead I could see
things that held my gaze before
A new life, people knocking at my door.

As though in the autumn of my years
is a time for rebirth of things new.
Adorning myself in a new coat
to fend of the breath of winter to come.

I will go forward now and seek out fun
As the autumn does not last long for some
If I see you there in the autumn of my time
Think of things now or then in past times

Realise that it is better to be.
Than to sit there waiting to see,
if the world will be knocking your door
Believe it is your life for evermore.

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I think it is a wonderful poem. The logic flowed and ended well. But I think you were so beautifully hopeful about the future to have chosen the title, "Shadow days." Or maybe it's just me thinking.

The world will not show its self I think that should have been itself.

Thanks for sharing.

Thank you for your visit and comment, it was a bad time when the shadows fell but as always the future has to be bright to give a person hope of some sort.
Take care out there,
Yours Ian..

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eternal, and we must follow it's leap. The sparrow has changed it's coat for the rougher winter protection. Time to gather around the fire and eat some of the seed that has fallen from the tree of summer. Nice thoughts. ~ Gee.
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Many thanks for your input.
The Shadow days were in the year 2000, since then I have walked in many suns rays and they have killed the shadows with their pure energy.
In the time we call the now, that is the only thing that exists for real. Things change in an instant from now to yesterday, as I said in one of my writes.
The future can be wonderful if we can ever control it.
A fascinating subject and as with love, it has many probability tracks, I oft wonder if the tracks meet in that ever world when we become another state.
Take care young Traveller and know that many walk with you,
Yours as always Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
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