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A true love is beyond feelings .

A genuine love is beyond feelings.
Ardent lovers are entirely weaklings,
only weaklings adhere to this concept,
pretext not to love, their hearts are inept.

Feelings feign love beyond estimation,
in a flicker, go into extinction.
Just as fickle as the course of a wind,
feelings change leaving acrid pains behind.

The pains left behind hover like a ghoul,
eat deep into the fabrics of your soul,
impress on your face a deep furrow,
as you swim, wade through the sea of sorrow.

You try to rekindle the embers left,
to see if they could once burn aloft.
Needless, feelings are pseudo burning desires,
gratified , they smolder without any fires.

Heartbroken, lonely with no one to turn to,
the pains soar with no clue whatever to do,
if it is someone you loved to the core,
the pains hurt deeper, even more.

The ones you treasure like golds and silvers,
know how to cut your heart into slivers.
Feelings are snares with alluring facades,
into which love from a naive heart cascades.

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Oh deep true love, that merchandising franchise!
You name it, you say it, few would.
There is sexuality and affection,
there is intimacy and friendship
there are varying degrees of all.
But deep, true, emotional love forever-
you named it- beyond feelings, leaving everyone feeling inadequate.
Onya.

cheers,
Jess
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An awesome review Weirdelf. Thank you so much I appreciate.

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I going to do a reading now, and I'm going to do it in a very ironic sense, you can take it or reject it without any censure from me.
A TRUE LOVE IS BEYOND FEELINGS by Marvel Godwyn
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/a-true-love-is-beyond-feelings-by-marvel-...
With your permission I will post it to our Neopoet Facebook site.
If you have suggestions for re-recording I would be happy to do it.
Ths is an impressive poem, worth the effort.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Yes, Weirdelf you have my permission and thank you once again, I appreciate.

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Okay sir

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really good

Thank you so much Lovedly, I appreciate your comment.

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inspired me just composed it
read if you may

Hi Lovedly, I feel so happy and humbled to know my humble poetry inspired you to write "All Love Is"
I indeed enjoyed reading it.

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A beautiful review Steph.ania.I so much appreciate this and thanks for your view.

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