Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Emotions pass them off

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2017-10-01 21:11

You appreciate poetry
all is mostly imagery
we all know it
and shall always create
some more similar ones

not only about sadness
but not gloom alone
also of happiness
we all need to survive today
to face a tomorrow
that will come our way
only as another today

so be happy poetry
is just an emotion
we pass our time mainly
and we entertain mostly

autumn has now set in
it soon will be history

the snows are in higher clouds
they soon will fall
then you will say
if winter comes
will summer be far away?

no, not all
will meet once again
after this fall

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

riotface97

Mon, 2017-10-02 02:12

Great to finally read some more of your work after all of the...

feedback you've left on mine. And I like it. I don't know all too much about this form, but I feel like that's part of what makes poetry so great; its abstraction from the concrete. But I, personally, am favourable to poems that seem to speak of something honest. I see this in your work, and I value it in your work also. I'm afraid I don't have any critique to offer other than to perhaps lose the "and" and the "now" in the lines (which, coincidentally, were some of my favourites of the piece);

we pass our time mainly
and we entertain mostly

autumn has now set in
it soon will be history.

But these are just minor suggestions to do with flow, not essence, and it's for the essence of this poem that I am grateful to have read it. Beautiful piece.

Nicholas.

lovedly

Mon, 2017-10-02 09:04